well i came here to say sorry i couldn't acomplish my promise... the thing is i am already one of the main commenters on a poetry thread from another forum and it's rather crowded. i barely have time for it...
what i suggest and plead you all is to express some opinions on poems which will be posted in here... some words of encouragement or some small constructive criticism would help a lot the poets posting in here...
now i want to express my opinion on scarletgothica
my dear your poem is far away from shameful! it's beautiful! the wording is brilliant for a weak english speaker as you say you are and the visuals are quite captivating and brilliantly constructed! i'm very impressed with your work! i would love to read more from you so if you want you can post more in here or send them by PM or not send them at lot if you don't want to lol. in any case keep writting! you're good at it!
hmmm here is something i wrote a week ago after a pause from poetry...
…IN EVERLASTING FALLS
Waterfalls of bleak emotions embrace my senseless core
I dream as I watch the decay of every single drop
Liquid passion poisons my very mind
As fire seems to rise from the grave of my solicitude…
Can’t you see their crystalline reddish eyes
Which fill my heart with unbearable anxiety?
Can’t you hear their searing screams?
Whispers, haunting weeps… “I fear thee!”
Shades of demons shroud the walls
Sculpting figures of utter dread
I wait patiently as I suffocate
But I know the day will come when distress will be conquered by calm…
Distinguished withered smiles of a blackened dusk
With reddish eyes turn towards me
The quicksilver ceases to corrupt my heart
As it quivers slowly to its end…
Yet I do not feel serene
For your implacable eyes still peer towards me
And your mind is still entwining my figure
Thus my breath’s whirl will never rest…
Acid rain falls upon the darkened forest
Leaving the trees naked in front of the splintered sky
I am nothing but a leaf searching for a branch to lie on
For I cannot face this eradicating fall alone…
Oblivion entreats me not to leave
But my soul will never live with this ethereal hunger
This hunger to run of my execrable fear
Which consumes me as days slowly pass…
Twisted images of black demons haunt my mind
As I lay enclosed by chains in their sight
I cannot help but scream in the face of damnation
Until the dread shall completely profound me…
and another note: Angellore thank you for your comment!